Sox Haiku Battle - Game 1

Sox Haiku Battle - Game 1
A.J. Pierzynski is congratulated by teammate Alexei Ramirez after Pierzynski's two run homer in the seventh inning. (Tribune Photo by (Chris Sweda)


The battle begins
Sox haiku in Red and White
Feel free to join in


Here's our first attempt at "dueling haikus" for the White Sox-Red Sox series. Starting with my haiku celebrating the White Sox 3-1 victory over the Red Sox.


Pierzynski home run
Gavin Floyd mound mastery
The Red Sox? They gone.


After the game I got some commentary and a couple of haiku from Jon:

When I saw Gavin Floyd was pitching, I started to worry, since we never seem to beat him. And sure enough we
didn't. Wakefield pitched well for us, but the wild pitch in the 6th and the home run ball to Pierzynski in the 7th
were two mistakes too many. Looked like a beautiful night out there in Chicago, despite the bad outcome. I guess
we'll settle for 2 out of 3.


small ball
go-go Sox
then A.J. went long


one of three
is all you get
we'll take two


Blain also sent some great haiku before the game ended.


dweeby Red Sox fan-
"The Night Chicago Died"
in the cassette deck


under ballpark lights
players cast no shadows-
boyhood heroes


old slow carp
swirl around this grassy pond
Wakefield's knuckleballs


Let's make this poet-versus-poet-versus-poet instead of team-versus-team. Remember, no points off for the guys from Bean Town simply because their haiku rules are more flexible. To show that we're good hosts here at Chicago Sports In Haiku, the question is written based on those more flexible rules used by our guests from the east coast. Be sure to leave a comment and perhaps contribute your own haiku.


White Sox 3, Red Sox 1

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  • Blain is neck and neck with Dan in the voting. Talent will out -- Blain is one of the best haiku writers around. In a sec I'm going back to vote for Blain.

    Dan's haiku is really excellent, particularly since he's conforming to the 5-7-5 "rule". Sticking to 5-7-5 is not often done in English haiku anymore, because it tends to make the writer force his or her inspiration into that existing structure. This often means an uneeded word or two gets into the haiku, when it might read better without that word or words being included.

    I'd urge Dan and Ed and the rest of the folks at Chicago-Sports-in-Haiku to think about freestyling it as we do -- a maimum of 17 syllables per haiku still, and no more than 7 in any one line, but using less than 17 if it sounds better that way, and not conforming to the rigid 5-7-5 format. It's clear the folks here can write some pretty darn good haiku. Giving themselves a little freedom will only make them even better.

    As for the game, I must say the Chisox played good fundamental baseball. Funny how you've dominated us lately. We're 8-1 against the Yanks, but can't seem to beat you guys. Tonight's gonna be the night!

  • Apologies for the typos -- should be "unneeded" and "maximum".

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